Tuesday, January 10, 2006

Retreive What We Can

This is based on a story about a woman who died of shark wounds. It is written from the perspective of the lead investigator of the case; it is a supposition of what his notes look like.

I investigate
murders.

Usually,

the perps run.

Here, they swim.

The case:
A woman
her church group
and
her dog.

The facts:
All swam
in shark
infested
waters.

Theory:
Crime of opportunity?

The dog made it out.

The rest of the church group
made it out.

The woman:

hands
----did not make it out
feet
----did not make it out
life
----

Suspects:
"If we found them,
I suppose
we
would try
to retrieve
them
and see if
they
have any body parts,"

----"The idea is to
retrieve
what
we
can
"

Theory revised:
Blood, a group outing, good times

Crime of opportunity?

Usually the perps run.

Here,

they swim.

11 Comments:

Anonymous Anonymous said...

I'll bet if they cut the shark open, they'd find the woman's hands gripping a towelrack.

Will this be considered genius, like the ASCII art about your juices? I'm just trying to CONNECT here. I'm attempting to share my EMOTIONAL INTELLIGENCE.

January 10, 2006  
Blogger Eugene said...

You are annoying me and everyone around you with your noxious negativity. Please share the fruits of your emotional inreach with somebody who cares to persuade themselves that you are worthing listening to.

January 10, 2006  
Blogger Shifty McPenis (Deceased) said...

Hee hee! You'll never catch me!

January 10, 2006  
Blogger Noralil Fores said...

Hey Eugene,
Really liked the humor as always of this piece and the imagery-the hands and feet. Had a problem though with the flow of the piece. Some of the stand alone words slowed down the poem for me. I wanted more of a change in the cadence so that when the words stand alone, the effect is greater.

January 10, 2006  
Blogger Eugene said...

THanks for the criticism!

January 11, 2006  
Blogger Eugene's Wife said...

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January 11, 2006  
Blogger Eugene said...

I don't think i can handle this.

January 11, 2006  
Blogger In verse said...

I like the part,

"If we found them,
I suppose
we
would try
to retrieve
them
and see if
they
have any body parts,"

The poem reads well, like an investigation report,the classic is crime of opportunity, very sarcastic.

What does perps tun, mean? I am sorry, I did get that part.

January 11, 2006  
Blogger Eugene's Wife said...

It'll be all right, dear. I'll cook you your favorite meal tonight: Thomas Fries!

January 11, 2006  
Blogger Eugene's Wife said...

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January 11, 2006  
Blogger Eugene's Wife said...

"Perp," by the way, is short for "perpetrator," or the assumed criminal.

I hope my honey Eugene doesn't mind my answering for him. :)

January 11, 2006  

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