Sunday, January 08, 2006

Exercise

The wonderful blog, Waiting for Words, suggested a 100 word exercise.

"We've got 100 words, only these 100 words.

He walked along the shoreline thinking that if only he'd come down from the shower earlier, he wouldn't have burned the anniversary cake. And logically if he hadn't burned the cake, she wouldn't have thrown her hands up and stormed out of the house in a fury. In his mind, if the cake had just come out, they would have made love, rolling around in chocolate icing. She would be happy that they'd been together for some many years. She would say quite clearly, "I still love you as much as I loved you back then." He'd know it was true.

Using these same words, write a new story."

So, I did! Here is my story. It is titled, "you," because that was the only word I couldn't fit in:

it was just around her anniversary. for some many years, She wouldn't come. true, back then, his mind would Logically say that he'd be happy if she had. He'd been rolling along up the chocolate shoreline And clearly he would have made a fury down in the house of love. She burned earlier, the hands in and out, thinking "I know I come as much as the shower." if they still loved, they'd have stormed together. only, He cake walked In love. from that, the cake icing hadn't quite burned. if he would, you wouldn't have thrown out the cake

Try Waiting for Words' exercise! It's great!

8 Comments:

Blogger Eugene said...

I should mention that I used all the punctuation, too, and not one more, hence there is no period at the end of the story

January 08, 2006  
Blogger Humour and last laugh said...

yes. but putting such wordly-limit is stifling to some!

January 08, 2006  
Blogger Noralil Fores said...

Hey Eugene,
I accidently left my comments back to you on my blog, but I'll try to remember all of them here. I love the thematic switch from the original piece to this piece. In this scenerio, they seem to have a happy relationship and yet she has a problem, doesn't know why. I love the fact that the same words could convey a totally different meaning. I also really like the role reversal-the fact here that she is faulted and not him. Cool to stay true to the punctuation as well. Not something that I would have thought of. That must have been really difficult. Kudos on such a great job.

January 08, 2006  
Blogger In verse said...

wow man...you are a genius...not kidding...i am serious. excellente.

January 08, 2006  
Blogger Phil O. Sophia said...

LOL!!!

January 09, 2006  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Wasn't "towelrack" included in the 100 words?

And why hasn't anyone noticed that the vast majority of Eugene's poems have to do with self-abuse? Doesn't that say something about the nature of poetry?

January 09, 2006  
Blogger Eugene said...

Thanks for the encouragement! It was a tough assignment. I used Microsoft word and pulled the words together. Yay for computers!

January 09, 2006  
Blogger Eugene said...

By the way, I think it is the man's fault for the problem. He cake walks in the house of love, which means he is a lazy guy. Anyway, great comments!

January 09, 2006  

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